Captain Cadaver portrait 01

I am working on a comic book project with my friend Wes and this is a portrait of the main character. I was trying to do something like Dan Hipp, who's style got me really inspired to work on this project again. It has been sitting on my back burner for a while. Mr. Hipp does a technique where he is uses dashed lines for shading, I took that technique and went over board with it and did it with multiple colors. I don't feel like it works. Though I understand why and I hope to make it better next time. There will be more on Captain Cadaver in the near future.